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Oh hey. I liked that. Your rhythm is so smooth and beautiful here. The long line in the middle was surprising and evocative.

I feel like in the first few lines, you are too intent on describing the specific journal while being pretty and oblique; it would be ok to make it more clear what you're talking about and allow the poem to move more quickly and deftly to the second half. In re-reading it, I think it's only the first three and a half lines that I object to; the ones after that are necessary to establish the "false impression" which makes the volta so effective.

The last five lines are fabulous and I love how it ends so quickly and cleanly. And of course, I echo the sentiment whole-heartedly. ^^

IN THE INTERIM BETWEEN:SUCCUMBING TO RICH ODOURS WROUGHT BY DARK WOODS STAINED DEEP OF FRUIT LADEN SCENTS, THE HAND WASHED COTTON PAPYRUS ESCHUED A
BOLD EDICT,THE DOE EYED WOMAN GASPED AT THE REALIZATION OF HER PEN'S PROWESS,AS OF THE STRENGTH GARNERED HER WHEN A DESPOT ATTEMPTS TO SADDLE HER EMOTION LADEN MIND,AND AS SHE EXHALED THE PUTRESCENT EVIL OF FORCED MEANINGLESS RELATIONS,THE INTERIM MOMENT SLIPPED AWAY,AND HER HAND PRAYED MIGHTILY THE PAPERS DESIRE:AND THE PEN LUGUBRIOUSLY SLATHERED PAPYRUS INTENT,WORDS AND THOUGHTS, UNDAUNTED BY AGE,POURED FORTH AS MIGHTY SCRIPT,A THESPIAN DELIGHTED DREAM,AS OF THE FIRST KNOWLEDGE POETRY,NOT A UNTRAINED MAIDEN WITHOUT THOUGHT OR MORAL,YET A WOMAN OF PROWESS AND COURAGE,BEREFT OF PREJUDICE TO THE SWEET SWAYING BECKONED FORTH OF PAPYRUS TOOL.SHE WROTE,OF POETIC MERIT,AND CLAIMED THE GODDESS RIGHT TO ENTRY LAIN BEFORE BY THE LADEN OF FRUIT SCENTED RICH WOODS OF HER BEING. for you,and for fun,your poem of last was inspiring enough to pen this quick laud to your talent.........jamesatyourdoor,d4qi,protractor,c3po,of late and sillie nethernet and now of more meaningful pursuits....take care.....james...do say hi as you will